I think I'm doing this right... but idk.

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For the benefit of the novice writer I present a simple rule with 3 principles. When applied this rule will allow new writers a chance to express their ideas more clearly and cohesively. My rule is to: Remain consistent with your topic and thematic strings throughout your writing. In order to do this, shape the directness of your writing so that it fits the subject-matter in order to create cohesion. Also, make sure that your topic is clearly presented and stuck to in order to focus on the central idea of your writing. Finally, it is imperative that you articulate what you want to tell the reader.


So instead of writing: "Joseph Williams effectively teaches bad writers how to translate ideas onto paper. These writers make numerous mistakes before improving using his principles. Furthermore, improvement is better than continuing poor writing habits."


Say this: "Joseph Williams' Style Guide teaches bad writers how to improve their skills. Williams utilizes 10 Chapters to illustrate just how simple improvement can be for thses writers."

Clearly express what you want to say to your readers and remain consistent. This will allow a beginner writer to have the proper usage for once.

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I am totally lost. Did I post my essay the right way? Do we revise everyone's essay or the same group that we had with the last revision.

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I LOVE your essay! It's really intelligent and a great rough draft, shouldn't need to change a whole lot for the final. It's great rule and good information! I enjoy the outside supporting text too :)

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Yes it is a GOOD START. I concur watch the I's.

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Your essay has a nice flow and is easy to read and comprehend. However, I agree with Alicia that, although you explain what Williams and Strunk and White have to say about the rule, but what are your thoughts? What can I learn from this rule to benefit my writing? My comments were in blue.

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I think your essay is full of interesting explanations and overall was easy to understand. Great job.

*My comments are italicized and blue. ; )

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I think that you have a really great style rule. However, it appears that you didn't spend as much time on this essay as you could have. Like Alicia said before, you are all over the place with you subjects. You should still keep your ideas, you just need to reword them into more of an organized and easy to read way.

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Great job on your first draft! I like how organized and easy to read it is. My favorite part is definitely where you make fun of "Chicago style"! Obviously my biggest suggestion is to make it longer. It seems that you already have ideas on how to do that. Quite honestly, I can't really suggest anything else because it really seems like you know what needs to be done. My few actual suggestions are in green. Again, great job!

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I thought the use of example was great, along with support from other sources. I do think you had a few long sentences but I did not loose focus. I think you did a very good job.

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